The Tremulous Haiku Thread

[Atom Eve]

The lone granger purrs.
His spit slowly breaks turrets
left from battles lost.

Luci cannons spark.
Sending forth their deadly load.
Many explosions.

Dretches on the floor.
Tyrants blocked by such small friends.
Soon the dretches fly.

Use 5-7-5.
Write some Tremulous haiku.
And feel free to post.

[Taiyo.uk]

Small aliens crowd.
Eagerly awaiting their potent sting.
The booster has been sawn.

[Superpie]

i r good bildar
lololololololol
*decons base and leaves*

[your face]

Fatfaes saves the day
Fatfaes eagerly bans superpie...
The last rant barfs out the remaining souls and perishes among his deconned egg...

[mooseberry]

I think this was used
In another thread somewhere
but this is very fun


Tyrants scourge the hills
o'er rise strike many men
guns blazed, aliens fell.., down

As the swarms approach
the man cried of broken friends,
let them die, all die

Mother, while we have
one hundred enemies, we
have one thousand friends

[kevlarman]

the injured goons
thought the niveus ledge was safe
my lucijump proved otherwise.

[techhead]

It was done before
In a thread that I started
I take no offense

[player1]

techhead is cool guy
he gives his blessing to n00b
who did not use "search"

or perhaps she adds
a new twist to what's become
a boring dead thread

i relish the chance
to thrill yet again to the
rhythms of haiku

[PIE]

this is the same thread
made by another person
I do not know why

[Atom Eve]

Resurrecting a
thread that has died months ago can
lead to many flames.

Jetters in the sky,
Thinking themselves safe from harm,
The goons disagree.

[player1]

"Jetpacks are too strong!"
Cried a n00b last week; I said,
"Please go play some more."

Atom Eve is new
At the Trem.net forums, so:
We'll cut her some slack.

I like maps by Trak.
Easter Eggs make me smile, Bud;
You know where I am.

Of course I had to
Edit my post because Eve
Likes to punctuate.

[PIE]

no one cuts noobs slack
you are speaking nonsense now
this thread makes no sense

[techhead]

Makes no sense to PIE
He does not grok poetry
I feel much pity

[PIE]

I grok fine thank you
you can not search in haiku
you waste pity here

[snb]

what the f***en hell?
this is a very wierd thred
your speach like caveman

[Taiyo.uk]

Baffled by technology,
You ponder the mystery of spell checkers.
The correct spelling is "speech".

[PIE]

sPeaches are good fruits
You can't fix forum spelling.
It will drive you nuts.

[snb]

I said cave man right?
it was done on purpose duh
the spelling mistake

[techhead]

Baffled by technology,
You ponder the mystery of spell checkers.
The correct spelling is "speech".

I think that you phail
Every line has too many
Syllables in them

[snb]

i really agree
but asian people are die'n
oops i said too much

[Circle]

Did I write these wrong? Never wrote a Haiku before.
oh, I did do them wrong, heh I thought it was 5,7,5 words..

The darkness has set in,
Hindering movement with the rapid infestation everywhere,
The human is still trapped,

Darkness has set in,
Hindering movement
Human still trapped


The bright and shiny lucifer
Why are you so pretty, you temptress
I cannot help but chase

Bright, shiny lucifer
temptress, so pretty you
cannot help, chase

(I'll fix these later)
The guardian, the protecter, defender
Never tiring, watching, waiting and striking quickly,
Known to many as Camper

Sitting quietly in the distance
A dretch, believing itself to be microsopic
In the distance, dead dretch

[kozak6]

The dretch hides above
An unobservant human
Carelessly runs past.

The dretch drops, silent.
Headbite- one evo is gained.
The dretch hides again.

Ah- evolution!
A basilisk skitters on.
Next stop- destruction?

A human is grabbed.
As the 'lisk gently tickles,
The human is doomed?

Three minutes later
The human is still alive.
The 'lisk tickles on.

Reinforcements loom.
The human has summoned aid.
The 'lisk is blasted.

/quit is slammed roughly.
Angry swearing is present;
Unfit for forums.

There is some comfort;
The poor basilisk is buffed
In the next version

[whitebear]

Players looking for room.
A Nonexistent path.
Mapper laughs out loud.

[snb]

five seven then five
this is how to write haikus
those were syllables

[techhead]

I, Haiku patrol
Come to show you the error
Of your haiku ways

Several haiku, see original post

I think you should know
All your haiku have mistakes
But you can fix them

...
...
Ah- evolution!
A basilisk skitters on.
Next stop- destruction?
...
...
...
The key bound to /quit is slammed.
Angry swearing is present;
Unfit for forums.
...

Your write good haiku
They make quite a nice story
But two have mistakes

Players looking for room.
A Nonexistent path.
Mapper laughs out loud.

Two lines of haiku
They each have six syllables
And you wrote just one

I have a feeling
That I might make a mistake
And get so busted

[Atom Eve]

Watch the dretches go,
rushing to the human base,
where turrets await.

[snb]

all you do is quotes?
that aint cool with me noobers
plz write your own posts

[techhead]

all you do is quotes?
that aint cool with me noobers
plz write your own posts

I spot bad Haiku
So if you make a mistake
Now you know better

And use some grammar
Those shortcuts in your typing
Destroy poetry

[Rocinante]

all you do is quotes?
that aint cool with me noobers
plz write your own posts

The point, I think, is thus:
Show them the errors they made
Therefore, quotes are good.

[kozak6]

My mistakes are caught
By techhead the proofreader.
I have one question:

What is the problem
With the first verse you cited?
It seems fine to me.

The second mistake
Is quite obvious to all.
Consider it fixed.