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Coyote's Luck
« on: May 28, 2009, 09:35:52 am »
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #1 on: May 28, 2009, 12:44:08 pm »
Exciting stuff so far  ;D can't wait for more!
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #2 on: May 28, 2009, 08:58:45 pm »
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #3 on: May 28, 2009, 09:50:09 pm »
:D
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #4 on: May 28, 2009, 09:52:51 pm »
Very nice.. as usual.

Please update your signature to point to the right URL.
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #5 on: May 28, 2009, 10:34:47 pm »
D'oh, yeah, I should do that.
I should get the site working first though.
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #6 on: May 29, 2009, 08:19:48 pm »
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #7 on: May 29, 2009, 08:26:45 pm »
Good read :). Keep going!
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #8 on: May 29, 2009, 08:31:09 pm »
Pointed sticks for the skewering of dretches to cook with the flamer later?  ;D
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Supertanker

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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #9 on: May 29, 2009, 08:41:02 pm »
Maybe. ;)
I hear they taste like giant roasted marshmellows, just remember to take off the legs first. They don't go down well.
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #10 on: May 30, 2009, 12:31:38 am »
Quote from: Supertanker on May 29, 2009, 08:41:02 pm
Maybe. ;)
I hear they taste like giant roasted marshmellows, just remember to take off the legs first. They don't go down well.

Not surprising humans have resorted to this. Marshmellow supplies run out fast with so much continuous camping.  ::)
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Supertanker

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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #11 on: May 30, 2009, 01:02:30 am »
Well, what did you expect? Since all the humans are cloned male soldiers, they never run out of sticks. Of course they'd need marshmellows and things to occupy their time while they're camping.

Like singing:
(To be sang to Home on the Range)

'Nade, 'nade of my own!
As we sing and TK all day long!
And the aliens fear our base to be near
And every second we moan!

I love to sit in the same spot all the time!
While the aliens, they plot and they play!
I never help out, I'm a lazy lout,
And my teammates, they call me gay!

'Nade, 'nade of my own!
From the room we never from roam
I love to press enter and watch armories splinter
When I toss that grenade at my own!

Spamming with binds is so very fun!
While my teammates, they bitch and moan
And with our heads, Aliens become well fed
They reach S3 and we groan!

'Nade, 'nade of my own!
In the hallways of ATCS
I go out alone and then I get blown
Even though I am the best!
(CHEATERS! HACKERS)

I don't speak English so fine!
But regardless the server is mine!
I spam and I camp and I vote for bad maps
And end up crossing the line!

'Nade, 'nade of my own!
From the server I finally get banned
But that's not fair, it was just hot air!
But the players, they are all glad!

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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #12 on: May 30, 2009, 02:04:53 am »
More story its god keep going!  :armoury: emregeny weapons? cool go on!
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #13 on: May 30, 2009, 08:26:56 am »
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #14 on: May 30, 2009, 08:32:12 pm »
CLAPTON IS GOD.

(Writing moar)
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Re: Clapton's Luck
« Reply #15 on: May 30, 2009, 09:02:06 pm »
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #16 on: June 01, 2009, 03:39:12 pm »
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #17 on: June 01, 2009, 03:48:53 pm »
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #18 on: June 02, 2009, 02:10:44 am »
Hold your horses, I'm not a writing machine!
Mwa ha ha...I just came up with some awesome ideas.
TIME FOR IMPLEMENTATIONS.

FEEL FEAR.
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #19 on: June 03, 2009, 07:58:19 am »
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #20 on: June 04, 2009, 02:52:44 am »
Not bad but: ,,,;,,,;,,;,;;,,,,
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Supertanker

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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #21 on: June 04, 2009, 03:47:37 am »
The heck is ,,,;,,,;,,;,;;,,,,?
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #22 on: June 04, 2009, 03:50:49 am »
Quote from: Supertanker on June 04, 2009, 03:47:37 am
The heck is ,,,;,,,;,,;,;;,,,,?

It's basically the same as ;,,,;,,,;,,;,;;,,,,,,
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mooseberry

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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #23 on: June 04, 2009, 04:49:21 am »
I mean you have an excessive amount of commas and semicolons.
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #24 on: June 04, 2009, 05:03:25 am »
Perhaps, but would you rather see a few instances more than usual of sentences connected with semicolons, or would you rather see me write a bunch of horrendously long run-on sentences, as they are apparently the expected standard of this board?

I'll keep an eye on it in the next chapter ;)
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #25 on: June 04, 2009, 05:08:52 am »
I would rather not see sentences such as this:

"Coyote caught fleeting glimpses, impressions of razor-sharp claws oozing slime, fangs glistening with drool, ferocious eyes glinting with malevolence. The monster moved fast; inhumanly fast, impossibly fast, and Coyote fought to get clear long enough for a clean shot."

((Just trying to help you improve.))
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #26 on: June 04, 2009, 05:12:39 am »
Thanks, I'll think about it. I did that on purpose to produce a more 'rushed' feel than, say, if I had separated the sentence with periods. I could have forgone punctuation in its entirety, but I think that'd have been worse.
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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #27 on: June 04, 2009, 05:17:45 am »
Quote from: Supertanker on June 04, 2009, 05:12:39 am
Thanks, I'll think about it. I did that on purpose to produce a more 'rushed' feel than, say, if I had separated the sentence with periods. I could have forgone punctuation in its entirety, but I think that'd have been worse.

I realize that you did this for the style of the story, but I think in this instance it is counter productive and ends up sounding somewhat amateurish. (No offense.)
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Supertanker

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Re: Coyote's Luck
« Reply #28 on: June 04, 2009, 05:57:04 am »
None taken; I'll try to work on it in the next chapter. Thanks!
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Re: Supertanker's Use of Punctuation
« Reply #29 on: June 04, 2009, 09:07:06 pm »
I personally do not find it objectionable, and if anything, I rather enjoy the rhythm and pacing. Just one correspondent's opinion, for what it's worth. Plus, I tend to write long sentences, include a lot of subordinate statements, and string together ideas and impressions like charms on a tennis bracelet, so I'm sympathetic to such utilization of commas and the like.

I'm just glad that this section of the forums has maintained a certain genteel air about it, where gentlemen can discuss such matters in a nurturing environment of civility and mutual respect. I salute you both.

Cheers
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