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Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 3
« on: June 03, 2010, 03:34:19 pm »
Note: This is all made by me. All except the weapons. No use of this without my permission is allowed. Thank you for reading.

Chapter 1- The New War

Prologue
It was the end of World War V. New weapons had been developed over this time and were hoped not to be used again. Five years later a new threat came. The humans stood together to confront this menace. And so they did.

  I was a new recruit of this war at the time. I was a frontline man. I didn't give support. I just attacked. We were being transferred to the place of the attack. When we got there we moved forward to a bunker of some sort. The frontline men moved out front. So there I was. "Hey kid. When you see them don't wait ok. You got that." It was Sargent. I just nodded. My friend Jackson was in the bunker to give support. "Lucky bastard," I told him. "So what Smirk." That's what everybody called me, Smirk. It was because when we were going through training I just smirked.
  Our only guy with a helmet or "The Reader" shouted "WE GOT A HUGE FLANK OF THESE GUYS!" That's when we got ready. The guy behind me said, "Shit these guys are big too." I was too scared to make out who it was. That's right when we could see them all running at us. We all let loose with hell.
  Two of the small brown ones got through and we took them out quick. A pink one shot out gas at me. I dodged it fairly easily then stuck my gun through him and fired. Dead. Then a huge one with six legs went right through us and attacked the bunker. Suddenly a hole opened under us. Sarge, Jackson, The Reader, and I fell through. We all heard the screams. I shuddered. We were the only ones left.
  The Reader cleared us of any alien threat. We finally found our way back to base through the tunnels. "Ok now what?" "I don't know Smirk," Sarge had said. The telenodes were mostly broken. The base had a door so we closed it. We then began repairing the telenodes.
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Re: Human Side Chapter 1- The New War
« Reply #1 on: June 03, 2010, 03:35:49 pm »
Even though it says chapter 1 on top I'll still use this one to post all the chapters for humans.
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Re: Human Side
« Reply #2 on: June 03, 2010, 08:02:46 pm »
I like this- even the aliens side oh and you can change it i think

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Re: Human Side Chapter 1- The New War
« Reply #3 on: June 03, 2010, 08:08:21 pm »
yeah you can. i found that out after though
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32
« Reply #4 on: June 06, 2010, 07:30:55 pm »
should i take out alien side because i got most of the chapters ready i just haven't found the time to post them. the alien side just isn't popular.
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32
« Reply #5 on: June 07, 2010, 05:03:39 pm »
alien side is pretty good the story is a tad short tho

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Re: Human Side By BlackX32
« Reply #6 on: June 09, 2010, 06:06:06 pm »
I am sorry guys but human side will be discontinued until further notice. i am having some problems in my family and my human papers got thrown away by accident. i also have a friend who i don't see very often coming ever very soon. sorry guys about the still prolonged delay.
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32
« Reply #7 on: June 18, 2010, 06:16:55 pm »
Chapter 2 - The New Weapon

"No! NOOOOOOO! Get away from me you foul beast!" 'Ahhhhhhhhhh! Whoa it was just a dream." I woke up with a start. The room was empty and it was cold and dark. I couldn't figure out where I was. The room was a pure black with just a couple of lights, a chair, a small desk, and the bed I was in. Just then a man walked in.

The man had a thick black beard, a buzz cut, and he looked like he was the kind of guy you'd hire to guard a base. "Who the hell are you?" "Son i wouldn't speak to me like that. But since you don't know who I am I'll go easy on you and let you off with a warning. My name is John. I am this base's top official. If anything goes wrong here it's my job to take care of it. Now can you tell me your name?" "My name is Steve Anderson, but you can call me Smirk." "Alright Smirk come with me."

We walked through hall that was filled with some of the weirdest equipment I have ever seen. "What is all that?" "That's what your fixing to find out."

We walked into a room full of more equipment. "What is this place?" "It's where we test all kinds of experimental tools and weapons." "Before i test anything because that's what I'm guessing what I'm gonna have to do where's the other members of my team. Two of them died when they came through. The other was badly beaten and is barely alive. His name was Jackson. "Well at least he's still alive."

A weird guy walked into the room at that moment. He had a grey beard and a white lab coat. Great the wise guy who invented all of this. "Welcome to building room 5 Smirk. Did I get your name right." "Yeah." "Good. You'll be testing the Gorilla Suit. It's like a battlesuit but it's bigger and more powerful and it only comes with one gun. A mix between a las gun and a Lucifer cannon. It will fire very powerful blasts that disperse at a very high rate of fire."

He pushed a button and a wall tuned completely. If what I was seeing was the Gorilla Suit then this was going to be fun.

 It was a suit that was completely covered and a hatch opened to get inside. When I hopped in it closed but I could turn my head and there was a screen that sowed every part of the battle field without me even turning the suit itself.  There were two gloves. Each had a ton of wire connected to it yet I could move them as freely as I wanted. One had what looked like the trigger of a gun and it was more of a blaster looking thing. I actually sat but I could move the legs of the suit by putting my legs and feet in some lower body gloves. They sent me out into a field full of the aliens I had seen at the old base but these things where in a chamber looked up that they couldn't get out of. In this suit I wasn't even scared. I pulled the trigger and bam it hit an alien knocking back at least 10 feet. one came at me and I used the other hand to punch it and it was dead. I was amazed and I went back into the building room. "It's ready."
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 2
« Reply #8 on: June 18, 2010, 08:27:42 pm »
lol. creative ^^

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Re: Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 2
« Reply #9 on: July 08, 2010, 03:00:19 am »
ok guys I had a human chapter ready but IT SUCKED XD. At least I'm honest and I didn't want to burn any of your eyes out. I've been playing as humans a lot to find insperation but I can't find it there. If you haven't noticed the two sides are very close together with somewhat and now the battle's boiled down the the last few chapters and this third one needs to relate to chapter three a lot. So if you want to help go read that chapter if you haven't and again if you need a refresher and make it relate to that. AKA the aliens have started the major attack.
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 2
« Reply #10 on: July 17, 2010, 02:00:19 am »
Finally got something in my head that was good. Oh and I’ll be posting at least every three days.


Chapter 3-One Last Hold Off Part 1

Prologue- The alien threat has taken all the major cities except for three. I was defending the most important- Rammounger. I was only going in as a last resort though.

“So are the new mods on the Gorilla Suit done yet?” I asked Doc.

“Smirk they are and let me tell you what they are. Instead of having only one gun it now has six and a sword. All you need to do is press the red button on top and it will change. Now the sword is a concentrated plasma-light energy sword. It can slice through almost anything so be careful with it,” Doc had said with no warning.

“Whatever Doc,” I replied.

We both heard a loud roar, then a huge BOOM! I hopped in the Gorilla Suit and before I could close the hatch Doc shook his head.

“What is it Doc?” I asked in a rude tone.

“If this is lead by that elemental tyrant then you’re our only hope,” he said in a worried voice.

“Doc you scaring me,” I replied ashamed of being scared.

“Don’t worry about,” he said in a hurry.

My pulse started racing when he said that. He was sounding like I was going to fail. And the Doc knew when something or somebody was going to fail.

I was sweating like crazy and Doc noticed it. He looked up with a smirk and I knew what that meant. He had confidence in me and that let me gain my strength back.

“Smirk please report to the battle lift and be sure you’re focused,” the intercom shouted.

“All right John,” I said in a serious but joking voice.

So many battlesuits made just for this city, all new and ready for battle. They all just stood around me and acted tough but when they noticed I was there they seemed worried because I was the last resort.

The lift started up and I could see why they wanted me. Dead bodies all around some ripped in half others chewed up, but the worst part was all the blood. Then I saw the elemental tyrant and he was all three elements at one time. My pulse raced again, I started to sweat a pond, and every fiber in my body said, “Kill all hell and what resides in it.”
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Ok guys I decided that the chapter threes will be only two part and that both of them will come out at the same time. In three days I wrap up this story of two different races that had a similar story on their journey.
 
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 3
« Reply #11 on: July 20, 2010, 10:47:48 pm »
The story is good, but is english your first language?

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Re: Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 3
« Reply #12 on: July 21, 2010, 01:04:14 am »
duh. yes of course it is. i know what you're gonna say "you need to get better at your english" but geeze it's just the way i write my stories that aren't gonna be graded because honestly these are more intresting trust me. otherwise i ,would make it so perfect it would be boring. and by perfect i mean NO mystery, NO excitement, and NO fun. so yeah that's why i write that way.
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 3
« Reply #13 on: July 21, 2010, 02:46:05 am »
What? Wanting your story to be interesting is not an excuse for poor grammar.  ??? And it will not change the substance at all...
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 3
« Reply #14 on: July 21, 2010, 06:35:48 am »
Mooseberry is right. Poor grammar does not make a story more interesting or intense. Quite the opposite, in fact. No one here expects perfection, but a well-written piece of work will carry you far.
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 3
« Reply #15 on: July 21, 2010, 03:53:40 pm »
what i meant was not the poor grammar. honestly i just want to get these two stories out and quick. then i shall be leaving for a while. i will be on vacation. after i come back i will fix any grammar mistakes. i have three days before we leave for a week. that's the reason for poor grammar. sorry if the story sucks but that is the reason why. i just want to finish this before my vacation. so yeah that's why.
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 3
« Reply #16 on: July 22, 2010, 11:17:10 pm »
guys i'm sorry if i seemed stressed out but i am. so the stories are postponed until i can chill out.
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 3
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 3
« Reply #18 on: July 24, 2010, 08:26:38 pm »
guys i'm sorry if i seemed stressed out but i am. so the stories are postponed until i can chill out.

Maybe this sounds bad, but try writing a lot instead, being really stressed out could be good inspiration and lead you to writing things you never would have thought of otherwise. Also, writing can help calm stress.
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 3
« Reply #19 on: July 25, 2010, 12:55:26 am »
guys I'm sorry if i seemed stressed out but i am. so the stories are postponed until i can chill out.

Maybe this sounds bad, but try writing a lot instead, being really stressed out could be good inspiration and lead you to writing things you never would have thought of otherwise. Also, writing can help calm stress.

OK then here's something that I'm going to say in about 10 sentence. Yes it's a story but one that I've written a long time ago that I turned into a Trem story for unknown reasons when I was stressed. Here it is:

Blood gushing down my face. Some mine, some others. I took my knife out and when a dretch tried to bite me I grabbed it and sliced it's head off causing a fountain of blood to come out.

I found a blaster and made a quick mod to it to make it shoot much faster. A basilisk came running at me, right after I fixed up the blaster and when it grabbed me I kicked it and stuck the blaster right at it's head. When it pulled the trigger brain, blood, and other things went flying everywhere.

Then I saw the exit, and started running but before I got there I heard a roar. I didn't have to look behind me to know that it was a Tyrant. Then just before I passed the door a sharp, bloody pain went through me. Blood was squirting out of me and I felt my head fly off and that was the last feeling I ever had.

No you see why I don't right when I'm stressed. I write gorier and my writing sucks. SO yeah that's why now writing when stressed.
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 3
« Reply #20 on: July 25, 2010, 03:01:40 am »
Well, gorier isn't a bad thing if used in the right context. However, it's pretty awkward to write in first person for a character that feels himself dying. :P I don't think I'd be jotting down how much it hurts just before my body grows lifeless.
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« Reply #21 on: July 25, 2010, 05:57:17 am »
Well, gorier isn't a bad thing if used in the right context. However, it's pretty awkward to write in first person for a character that feels himself dying. :P I don't think I'd be jotting down how much it hurts just before my body grows lifeless.

Sometimes, you just ignore that fact. It is fiction after all. :P I don't think that is bad writing in anyway black, its a bit rushed, but if you open your mind some neat things might fall out. I would classify that under grindhouse sorta fic, definitely not a bad thing, if you're in the mood.
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Re: Human Side By BlackX32 Chapter 3
« Reply #22 on: September 11, 2010, 04:15:29 am »
i still can't believe i have't finished this. i just don't have time like i used to and i'm lazy. i don't find it fun anymore
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