Several parts of the "magazine" were taken directly from somewhere else, and only once was anyone credited for any of it. The Savage bit directly from the game's promotional info, the Tremulous bits from the Tremulous Wikipedia article, and the first part of DS review from a review commonly quoted from
www.pcmag.com -- not the part that you credited, though. The parts of the "magazine" that weren't plagiarized are lacking both a sense of layout and any sort of command over the language that you're presenting it in. The whole thing was completely devoid of any journalistic feeling -- I'd be ashamed to even see things like this go into editorials.
In short: get an editor to check all your stuff, don't plagiarize (at least cite your sources), and severely rethink your method of putting it together.
You can take this, with an ounce of salt, from an English Education major, and a man that served all four years of high school as his school newspaper's head editor.
