Author Topic: How a map dies.  (Read 7462 times)

Mr.Mustashio

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How a map dies.
« on: October 14, 2010, 11:54:44 pm »
It shook with the fury of the gods.

A static, hammering crescendo emitted within eight fiery jaws, each muzzle flash a curse upon all before them.

Beneath it lay a multitude of shining copper, before it was only death, a bane to all gurgling nightmares of the cold-beyond.

None passed.

The warrior stood amidst a sea of bodies, his armors once pale complexion now stained with the green life-blood of innumerable grangers, who's corpses choked the vast corridors of Liberalous.

Yet still more of the evil creatures eagerly rushed to feed the experimental chaingun, who's barrels glowed red with the heat of its exertions.

But despite his efforts, and his godly armament, it was not enough against such an unstoppable flood. As the seething green mass slowly

closed in, the soldier realized the inevitability of his doom, and with his mouth spread in a wicked grin.

"Come on! The battle suit roared, pumping his fists into the air.

Like an ocean the swarm surged forwards, swamping him with it's gurglyness.

For a brief moment a mound of Grangers existed where once had been the battle suit.

It was at this point the grenade blew up and Libralous ceased to exist.

 


« Last Edit: October 15, 2010, 01:46:57 am by Mr.Mustashio »
Filling in the gaps of absolutely everything.


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CreatureofHell

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Re: How a map dies.
« Reply #1 on: October 15, 2010, 04:14:25 pm »
A static, hammering crescendo emitted within eight fiery jaws, each muzzle flash a curse upon all before them.
emitted by?
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The warrior stood amidst a sea of bodies, his armors once pale complexion now stained with the green life-blood of innumerable grangers,
armor's

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who's corpses choked the vast corridors of Liberalous.
whose

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who's barrels glowed red with the heat of its exertions.
whose

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As the seething green mass slowly closed in, the soldier realized the inevitability of his doom, and with his mouth spread in a wicked grin.
This sentence has no ending.

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Like an ocean the swarm surged forwards, swamping him with it's gurglyness.
Its. Apart from that this line is the best bit ever.

Very sad for Granger lovers though.  :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( :'(
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mooseberry

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Re: How a map dies.
« Reply #2 on: October 16, 2010, 08:26:29 am »
Also you spelled the name of the map wrong making this entire story pointless.
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Mr.Mustashio

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Re: How a map dies.
« Reply #3 on: October 17, 2010, 06:13:07 pm »
._. 



Ok. Thanks for the critique, I wrote this at a whim merely in an attempt to work on my lacking skills as a writer. It's been quite some time sense I last attempted to make something so I'm not particularly surprised that this short-story fails.




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Repatition

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Re: How a map dies.
« Reply #4 on: December 23, 2010, 12:43:51 am »
Stupid was here

swamp-cecil

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Re: How a map dies.
« Reply #5 on: December 23, 2010, 03:13:56 pm »
Stupid was here
Hey, i didn't post yet! D:<
these are stupid suggestions, don't even waste our time.
I don't like your negative attitude.

Repatition

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Re: How a map dies.
« Reply #6 on: December 28, 2010, 10:52:39 pm »

Kingnickolas

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Re: How a map dies.
« Reply #7 on: December 29, 2010, 06:32:10 am »
Epic bsuit. Good job. There must have been quite a lot of grangers to take down a Bsuit...

Pazuzu

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Re: How a map dies.
« Reply #8 on: December 29, 2010, 01:34:18 pm »
How a thread dies: Repatition shuts his mouth and lets it live out its natural life.

ok, can you give me the tool thingy app that can code?

Qrntz

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Re: How a map dies.
« Reply #9 on: December 29, 2010, 04:27:44 pm »
How a thread dies: Repatition shuts his mouth and lets it live out its natural life.
PIME TARADOX

You make up Qrntz, u always angry, just calmdown. :police:
I am stupid idiot who dares to open mouth and start debating

Pazuzu

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Re: How a map dies.
« Reply #10 on: December 29, 2010, 04:31:28 pm »
What? Death is a part of life.

ok, can you give me the tool thingy app that can code?